Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 5:06am

The destruction of the Dumbledore Obliviation Attack was chilling. I did not have a clue how you could fix that.

It was so rattling that I couldn't be any gladder that it was a dream.

Well done!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 3:55am

You handled the extended questioning very well - giving Ginny and Hermione a long time of questions but logically letting the other three do little.

The conflict with the Slytherin dealt with one item I find particularly vexing in canon - how Dumbledore could let the Slytherins and Snape do what they did for the first few years. Dealing with issues of right and wrong are the particular domain of an educator in the student's formative years. I've spent a lot of time having Harry and Dumbledore thrash that out in my sixth year tale. (Dumbledore is not limited by political correctness)

Great tournament!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 2:03am

Brilliant, brilliant, BRILLIANT!

Dealing with Lucius, getting rid of Draco and Snape, freeing Dobby, telling his friends, getting their absolution, and letting Ginny ask the question so simply and answering his unasked question with equal ease - - -THIS WAS A FABULOUS CHAPTER!

Major kudos to you.

Viridian replied:

Thanks!

Glad you liked it... though I think I'm going to have trouble topping this one...

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 12:58am

Molly and Arthur's feelings about their children and Harry (as seen through Arthur's eyes) are so perfectly within canon. Very well done.

Terrible cliffie at the end. Glad the next chapter is written.

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Thursday 2nd November 2006 12:56am

Harry's dealings with Percy were very well done.

I hope you have a great deal of nastinesses in store for Lockhart.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 1st November 2006 4:13am

Excellent Christmas.

Wonderful find-and-rescue Sirius.

You just have to love Arthur to pieces.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 1st November 2006 2:56am

You just can't do enough bad stuff to Lucius, but having Arthur do it makes it a bit sweeter.

Gobsmacking a dog - brilliant!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 1st November 2006 1:47am

The whole Dueling Club episode was brilliant.

Dumbledore telling Harry and his friends the prophecy at this point is really appropriate.

Telling that Snape did nothing to Draco but wanted Harry censured after the duel was a very good point.

I'm going through writing Harry discussing with Dumbledore the moral questions of right and wrong as they apply to Draco and Snape. This chapter did a very good job of making the point from a second-year's perspective.

Cheers!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 1st November 2006 1:36am

I loved Harry telling off Percy.

The discussion of 'disappearing' Sirius was chilling.

Fine work.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Tuesday 31st October 2006 12:55pm

Wonderful Neville-to-the-rescue scene.

I love a strong and capable Nev.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Tuesday 31st October 2006 12:54pm

Excellent self-talk for Dumbledore. I can't really blame him for being hesitant about Harry, but doubting Arthur is low.

Great tale!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Tuesday 31st October 2006 11:17am

The work explaining wards was terrific.

Fine writing.

Jadzia7667 posted a comment on Tuesday 31st October 2006 9:04am

This is amazing. You are incredibly detailed and original. I look forward to the rest of the story.

bluezy posted a comment on Tuesday 31st October 2006 2:03am

I must say, I am really enjoying this story. It does touch some nice points. Please do continue.

bluezy

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 3:12pm

This whole story to datr retold from Ginny's view was very well done.

I would have only been redundant.

Just choice.

Tildessmoo posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 1:14pm

That... Was absolutely the best version of "Harry tells everyone what's really up in the ministry and the wizarding world" that I've ever seen. Which is quite an accomplishment, considering how many people noticed that glaring omission in Rowling's version of events. It's also probably the best version of "Rita Skeeter interviews Harry Potter," although a couple others might be so sensational as to merit a co-first place...

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 12:51pm

The interview with Sirius was heartwarming and gut wrenching.

Just great stuff!

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 12:50pm

The family interactions and how Harry is learning to fit in are very well written.

When Harry said, "I could just AK them and ask for her next choice,' I snorted - that's hysterical.

Great confrontation with Dumbledore.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 12:45pm

Your flashbacks to the future/past deaths of people are heartbreaking.

Fabulous tale.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 5:47am

This is a tough but marvelous chapter.

Finally, Harry gets some family time.