By Viridian
Reviews
Christopher Patton posted a comment on Tuesday 8th May 2007 3:24am
Great chapter. Does the spell that Harry used against the boggart translates as "Black Hole"? If so it reminds me of Kinsfire having Harry conjure anti-matter against Voldemort in one of his stories.
I really like seeing Neville response to his Gran's Howler and his own Howler back to her was perfectly in character for him.
Professor McGonagall pointing out the differences in Harry's responses to the injuries sustained by those who attacked him last year and his response to Remus's injuries was nicely done. I also like how she picked up on it when Dumbledore missed it completely.
Thanks for another great part to this excellent story.
Chris
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Tuesday 8th May 2007 1:56am
Great chapter, I cant wait to see what Neville’s Gran has to say when they meet. It should be a great show.
Thanks for writing.
MPF
storiesdr posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 11:47pm
Really enjoying this story and as always eagerly awaiting the next chapter. However, two points:
Lupin shook his head. "I’m not Dumbledore, Harry; I don’t think everyone can be saved. I believe there comes a time and when justice must be meted out. I don’t think anyone knows exactly how many deaths he’s caused, how many lives he’s ruined. If any living person deserves your hatred, he does." I presume you meant "a time and place when"; and
"Austrailian Magical Governments" should be "Australian Magical Governments".
Regardless, as stated, I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Thank you.
Lord Matrix posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 10:47pm
Very well done.I see that even this far into the story the character development has not stop and it is always nice to something new of the people in the story.
Amamama posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 10:38pm
Woohoo! Some serious action, and Neville standing up to his gran - wonderful. Guess Mrs.Stebbins will soon discover that Neville knows who's been talking?
Great story, a pleasure to read, and I so look forward to the next instalment.
Thank you for sharing!
Berte
Aberbadger posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 10:24pm
Damned Yankees! Overpaid, oversexed, and over here!
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 6:50pm
*laughs* Oh, that was a good chapter and well worth the wait. The bit with the boggart was "interesting" and it will be most enlightening to see Remus' reaction when he's told the full truth. I have to wonder why McGonagall went pale when Harry gave her that innocent smile; I have to think it was way, way too much a reminder of James Potter and she likely remembered that presaging some truly outrageous pranking. I do love the revenge Neville and company obtained, that Hufflepuff boy is going to think real hard about annoying some people again and I think Neville's gran is just now realizing that he's maturing into a most formidable young man (heck of a way to find it out, though - her tough luck to push it).
Wolfric posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 6:49pm
Good chapter. I wonder if Harry is going to have a real melt down from all the stress? He seems to need another good chat with Sirius or Arthur to release some pent up anxiety. He is trying to keep a number of balls in the air. I enjoyed the boggart encounter and the prank actually there is lots of good stuff in this chapter. Thanks for writing it. W.
Terry Chang posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 5:11pm
kick butt neville, kick butt!!! - sorry, had to get the fanboy review out of the way.
waited quite some time for this story, which was cool as it gave me time to read your Naruto story (the first one, not the new one you're also writing). reeeaaalllyyy good by the way. i think it's just a bit better than this current harry potter one you're writing, but i'm not sure if it's because i don't know anything bout naturo so that everything i read of your story is fresh or not.
i also like how after a break (not sure if you intended this or not) you came back with a very nice segue into neville's story a bit. i personally enjoy stories bout some of the fringe hp characters like neville, bill w., charlie w, luna, etc, so on and so forth fifth and sixwith.
thanks for a great story, i'll head on back over to naruto until the next chapter of either story. and i hope this comment was coherent enough to be understood. i just reread it and it kinda seems all over the place. oh well. late.
Lansydyr posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 3:58pm
Well, another NoFP fix, yea!
In about a month, I'll be shaking, going through withdrawal symptoms, dry mouth, blurry eyes, increased hostility, etc... so ignore my sillyness and take your time with the next chapter.
Can't wait.
liquidfyre posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 3:44pm
Oh and to Mrriggeri dont think the ghost flinch from minnie was because of TMR BUT because his Innocent smile was probly with his looks making him look just like a young james potter as he claimed innocence for a marauder prank
liquidfyre posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 3:42pm
Good chapter i LOVED Neville's response.
as for the naysayers, well, they can go bugger themselves with bazookas. It is YOUR story not thiers and its a damn good one so keep doing it the way YOU think it should go and i am willing to bet you cold cash that its still gonna get ALOT of readers.
Kail posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 3:10pm
Happy birthday to me! Happy birthday to me! Happy birthday happy birthday! Happy birthday to me!
Yes, it really is my birthday. And I can think of no better present than an eagerly awaited chapter of a fic that I have followed religiously every since about chapter one, I do believe.
Top marks for this one - you really caught the essence of what Harry's boggart would have become, I feel. Reactions, discussions, and the like follow very well also - though had I been a wand-wielder in the hall outside of the Hufflepuff rooms I would have not have restrained myself as much as I know Harry and the gang did.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter all over again!
scott2 posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 2:57pm
wonderful chapter :)
rejeimha1 posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 2:29pm
I was almost certain that Harry was found out and would have to spend the rest of the chapter finding a suitable excuse for that explosion, but then you proved, again, that you are much smarter than me, and the more logical outcome came out. The multiple points of view in this chapter was great. I don't think I have ever scene the story ever explained from Dobby's POV, but yours was not only the first, it was also more acurate than I would have thought possible. The pranks were wonderful. When Neville asked how to make a Howler I had to scrape my jaw off the floor, but that was nothing compared to the scene of it being received. That part about Mrs. Stebbins not wanting her family involved made me chuckle at the irony, but maybe that was just the after effect of seeing Hedwig prove her cleverness by droping her own dung bomb at the tea party. I just about died laughing. Good luck with balancing your life as you write the next chapters to both of your stories.
rejeimha
MrRigger posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 1:49pm
Hmm, Dumbledore is going to know something's up with the passing of this chapter. I agree that he won't figure it out, but he will know that there is something wrong. And McGonagall knows something, otherwise she never would have flinched like she did when Harry smiled at her.
Just where in time do you place her? Did she know Tom Riddle as a student? She wasn't a professor yet, that was Dumbledore, but she could have been a student with him, and that smile could have reminded her of him. Riddle was well loved because he never got in trouble, could he have perfected that 'Look, I'm so innocent it's painfully obvious I'm guilty, but you don't care because you want to believe in me, don't you Dumbledore' look, and Harry's smile reminded her of him? It's just a thought, and now that I look at it, probably not the best one, but there it is.
The boggart was handled well, and I thought it was interesting. You mentioned it was the image that had the most strong negative associations, could that mean a boggart could produce something you hate, if the negative associations are stronger than the strongest fear? That's where my mind jumped.
I want Harry to go up against Fudge, I really do. I think it would be great. I know it probably won't be soon, but I can't wait for it to happen. Maybe Goldfarb could do some digging, get the dirt, and use that somehow.
I can't wait for Neville to go after his Gran. That should be hysterical.
MrRigger
Alex Mcpherson posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 1:05pm
Harry tried to give her his most innocent smile as he assured her that everything was under control… really, he did. His smile was absolutely nothing like the evil grin he’d given Neville earlier.
So why did Professor McGonagall suddenly go pale and step back like she’d seen a ghost?
Harry suddenly looked like his dad - atleast, more then he usually does?
Or you making him a Metamorphmagus (unnatural one at that)...
I think the former, hope the latter, expecting neither.
amulder posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 12:45pm
I *LIKE* your Neville. I'm really looking forward to what happens with them next.
Hermione, also, was very wise in counselling Harry concerning the adults likely interpretation of his little blow-up. Very well done. Nicely done how you built us up, expecting a big todo, and then quietly punctured it with a bit of "occam's razor"-type of reasoning.
thanks for sharing
...art
QOShea posted a comment on Monday 7th May 2007 12:34pm
Good chapter, but tooooo short! *grin*
BT posted a comment on Tuesday 8th May 2007 4:29am