shawn151 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th November 2007 8:55am

i love this fanfic so much because you keep things going the same way as the anime/mangaa but you didn't change any big major events too much, other then the fact naruto and kiba switched teams of course, but the things that people take for granted. Like just naruto's eating at a different restaurant then ichiraku's will probably effect how he performs in battle. But now im getting off topic so anyway i think this is the best reading i've had since well ever, nightmares of futures past excluded.

Crazy posted a comment on Thursday 8th November 2007 11:53am

Reading through your fic again (damn you for getting me addicted! :) good though) and I noticed that in "Geniuses of Hard Work" that Hinata uses the Divine 64 Strikes, but I think that that technique just sounds so much better (more impressive anyway) when you label it by the Japanese description, Hakke Rokujuyon Shou. Does Hinata know how to do the Kaiten, because I think that she would have been taught the theory behind them at least, even if she hadn't been able to fight against her sister much.

Looking forward to all your work, keep it up!

James13 posted a comment on Sunday 4th November 2007 1:30pm

Now _this_ chapter is a wonderful surprise. I so rarely find good naruto fics, and this one is a gem of a find :)

Good work, I have you bookmarked now :)

Zarz posted a comment on Sunday 28th October 2007 12:40pm

More thoughts: I loved Naruto "handing over" the scroll, but did he actually expect to have to use that trick and thus prepared it? I wouldn't think he would have had time to wrap it all up in the short while he was rummaging around to find the thing.

I also hope that the two groups work together to get a fourth scroll. If the two groups have different scrolls, at least it'll be obvious who gets this scroll. If they have the same one, however, it may take some quick talking to keep them all from fighting between themselves.

I loved how Naruto pranked his Sensei! It's great how he actually has enough attention and things to do he doesn't need to prank anymore, but it would be fun to see some more non-harmful pranks along that line.

Again, really, really great story! I love it!

Zarz posted a comment on Sunday 28th October 2007 12:32pm

This is so cool! Before reading this I knew nothing about Naruto save that it was about ninjas and Naruto had some sort of fox demon/spirit/thing inside of him. Now I'm starting to get obsessed with the series! Of course, I think your portrayal of Naruto may have spoiled me for the real thing! The characterization of Naruto, Sano, and Hinata, as well as their Sensei, are just great! I love the teamwork and bonding you've put in. It's so cool what they can do when they work together!

Now, I've never read the manga, so perhaps this is an irrelevant question, but given how the previous test they were given wasn't testing what the examiners said they were testing, I have to wonder about this Forest. On the face of it, this task seems pretty straightforward - get the other scroll and get out of the forest alive. But given how much attention was put on not opening up the scroll, I wonder if that's actually necessary.

This is a really, really great story, and I can't wait for the next update!

Kurotenshi posted a comment on Sunday 28th October 2007 9:27am

I would like to start by saying I love this pairing and his story more than words allow so I'm not going to try. However because of this I must say damn you! I found this early morning on Saturday and have literally stayed up all night to try and digest all I could of this awesome story before getting yelled at, and I did. I'm really enjoying how the character development is going and I'm often finding myself at awe at how much more I likeShino and Naruto than normal canon. Naruto because while I like him for the same reasons as Hinata he gets annoying if you listen to him talk for too long, Shino because...its inevitable with the time focused on his character. Kiba also seems more likable than normal likely because he has undergone the things Naruto would have had he been assigned to Team 7 like in canon.
Onto the actual chapter: at first I was confused as to what was happening but you did a good job explaining it quick enough to keep me from losing my train of thought so kudos to you! I particularly enjoyed the fight with Orochimaru as it demonstrated everyone's abilities well especially the fighting prowess of the much ignored Shino. I like Sakura's change of heart and how she actually had to realize and come to terms with her own retched nature more than just "always looking at their backs" as a solid and believable reason for her change, though the lack of Lee makes me wonder how Sauske will hold his own in the matches becuase as Shino observed Sasuke is lacking in the stamina he would have gained sparring with Naruto and he no longer as the Shishi Rendean to fall back on meaning he'll have to rely more on his ninjutsu and personally learned taijutsu rather than another's techniques. Neither of which he doesn't seem good at; whenever he has a choice between gaining power on his own or having it given to him he'll choose to take the power rather than work for it(read curse seal). The short reprisal between the fights was also well done and brought me to the very edge of my seat wondering how Naruto would deal with the third chakra and how, if at all, he would use the curse seal. During the actual second fight I loved the emphasis on Hinata's battle, speaking of which *parties due to Hinata fanboyism*, sorry but still I'd enjoy seeing Kabuto try and fix Zaku's hand hehe. I can't wait to see how Naruto meeting Kyuubi earlier due to circumstances affects the story and how the lack of burning scroll will result, if at all. Now comes the hard part, waiting for the next installment, because I love this story.

Treecat posted a comment on Sunday 21st October 2007 12:14am

This was rapidly becoming one of the happiest days of her life, definitely the happiest since her mother died.

Should this be This was rapidly becoming one of the happiest days of her life, definitely the happiest since before her mother died.
The first way it sounds like the day her mother died was extremely happy.

ShadeHawk posted a comment on Tuesday 16th October 2007 9:48am

I wonder a bit if you would follow Naruto timeline and events in your A.U. not that I've read / watched Naruto... well, except watched a few episodes, and read a few alternate universe / time-travel stories.

What is interesting is the fact if Team 8 (which is mainly about information gathering) would find I guess suspicious that the Sound team who tried to kill them knew so much about mere genins. Here Kabuto cards come to mind... Hmmm... would Hinata recognize "freaky grass genin" even in disguise?

Erik Wiggins posted a comment on Thursday 11th October 2007 7:51am

I didn't want to read this! I want you to finish Nightmares of Futures Past! But Now I'm hooked on this. Naruto Kicks some serious butt and I truly appreciate your extraordinary talent!

JohnMc posted a comment on Tuesday 9th October 2007 1:53pm

This fanfiction was actually the first one I ever read. Since then I've literally read hundreds and this one remains, without a doubt the best and my absolute favorite. Please don't keep me waiting too long for the next chapter!

zukertort posted a comment on Thursday 4th October 2007 12:19am

I really like they way you are "carving" out the characters. They are believable, Naruto is a little more deep (I always thought his constant boisterous, semi-dumb manner in canon somewhat overused) and placing him with a "devoted" instructor instead of Kakashi was a great twist - and necessary to develop the Naruto/Hinata pairing as it would be very difficult otherwise.

I am a big fan of both your Potter and now Naruto fanfics and can't wait for a new chapter (to either of them)!

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 30th September 2007 4:49pm

Can't wait for more. Keep up the good work!

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 30th September 2007 3:58pm

Another great chapter.

I like the way you've had Naruto start to use his intelligence to think about things. I really like seeing Naruto grow as a person.

Having said that I do hope you don't change Naruto too much as I do enjoy the verbal barrage that can come from him. It makes things very interesting. :)

Keep up the good work.

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 30th September 2007 2:53pm

I have just recently started reading Naruto manga. And I've progressed far enough into the series to start looking for fanfiction. I'm quite happy to have found this story. Most of the Naruto fanfiction written today just isn't in my taste so I'm happy to have found one that seems to be quite well written.

I like the way you have given Yuuhi Kurenai a brain. I can't wait to see how Naruto grows under her teaching.

I am eager to see how Hinta and Shino will also grow under her teaching. As well as what kind of affect Naruto will have on them?

I can't wait to read more!

Infin1x posted a comment on Sunday 16th September 2007 5:31pm

I am definitely glad I finally took the time to read this. I haven't read much Naruto fanfic but this is the best so far.

skulLXeon posted a comment on Saturday 15th September 2007 8:17pm

Well, i must say i am impressed. This is a very well written naruto fic...
good job all together....
i'll see you around when you update... :D
adios for now...

timmerator posted a comment on Saturday 15th September 2007 10:27am

Ouch... thats gotta hurt. I haven't read alot of Manga? But I do really like this story, I ran accross this as I was reading your other very good read about a more proactive HP. You do have a nice flow to your work and I appreciate that you are willing to share it with the rest of us.
Thanks
Tim

Prince Charon posted a comment on Saturday 15th September 2007 6:08am

Very, very interesting.

Thank you for the update.

More soon, please.

tryptophan36 posted a comment on Thursday 13th September 2007 1:40pm

Oh love! Oh light! Oh rapture! More Team 8!
Thank you!
I agree on Kyuubi btw. I hate fics where they make him a total woobie. He's a badass demon. Pragmatist just makes sense though.
Between this and NOFP, I'm really getting the idea that you like things to still happen despite changes (curse mark anyone?). This of course makes me happy since that is my favorite kind of AU.
Thank you again!

Quizer posted a comment on Thursday 13th September 2007 7:04am

Wow, what a shocker. I was a bit dismayed to see Sasuke receive the curse seal as usual, but I guess you saw more promise in doing something differently with it instead of forgoing it outright. You do have plans, right? ;)

I was even more alarmed to see Naruto get one as well. I guess it was a bit much to expect the genin to be able to take on Orochimaru, though they held their own admirably. I like how you got the careful balance between their skill levels just right. He is clearly superior, but they are affecting him - dealing damage to him is not outside their capabilities.

I was very relieved that Naruto managed to get rid of the seal with the help of the Kyuubi. Was the whole thing an excuse to have Naruto meet the fox earlier, or are there other long-term effects for Naruto? Also, I have to wonder what the effects of introducing the fox early will be. At any rate, I'm looking forward to more episodes of Naruto and Kyuubi slinging insults back and forth... that was certainly entertaining.

Nice job on Hinata consciously realizing that she loves Naruto. I wonder how that will affect her future behavior towards him.

Some unpleasant stuff happened to our heroes in this chapter, but I have faith that you won't do unspeakable and irreversible things to them that impact the entire rest of the storyline for the worse... not just yet, at least! ;) I'm much looking forward to the next parts.


Quizer