Zero Blitz posted a comment on Thursday 9th March 2006 8:40am for Geniuses of Hard Work

Hey, this is the first Naruto fanfic I've read (though, I'm gunna start looking for some now) and it's really good so far. I like the idea for Naruto's team in this fic, but why does Sasuke hate Naruto in this? In the manga, he just seems to see him as another challenge who's lead a similar life but in the opposite direction (as shown in chapter/episode 3, where Sakura says that Naruto's spoiled because he doesn't have parents or rules but Sasuke tells her that the feeling of loneliness far outweighs the feeling of being yelled at). Is he gunna be Naruto's rival all throughout the fic?
I haven't paid much attention to Hinata in the manga, but her and Sakura have been the only ones I'd thought would work, and since the manga is Naruto/Sakura why not do Hinata? I think she'd make a really good character once she gains a little more confidence (well, she's a good character now..).
I don't know you chose Shino (in the long run), but I hope he turns out well and are you gunna show us any of Kurenai's special techniques any time soon?
I don't really know what to say at the moment because there aren't any noticable mistakes and the story flows really well, I just hope you don't take too long with the Naruto/Hinata stuff (like you're doing with H/G in NotFP, although with good reason) and although you say this is gunna be your secondary story to NotFP, I think this is just as good, so if you have ideas for both, don't just do NotFP, do them both (just at a slower rate).
Keep up the good work.

WingsofLead posted a comment on Thursday 9th March 2006 6:11am for Geniuses of Hard Work

Gets more interesting as things go on. Team 7 goes on their C-rank mission without Naruto, leaving me to wonder how things have gone for them without Kyuubi's extra power against Haku. Though admittedly, the Demon brothers and their chain wouldn't have come as much of a suprise to the genins with Kiba on their team. It wouldn't suprise me if they came back with a failure to protect the bridge builder this time though.

Naruto is advancing in his maturity to a great degree, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Quizer posted a comment on Thursday 9th March 2006 3:12am for Geniuses of Hard Work

> She’d have to find an excuse to talk to the
> man at some point. Naruto might just be a
> regular customer to the man, but it wouldn’t
> do to make assumptions.

I don't understand at all what she's on about here. What ulterior motive could the guy possibly have for being friendly to Naruto and his friends?
If we are going to find out later, don't spoil what will happen yet.

Quizer

Quizer posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 10:55pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

I also wonder what Hinata's father will make of her defeating the infiltrator in battle. Sure, Naruto roughed him up first, and Shino's bugs kept him from using ninjutsu, but he doesn't need to know that, does he? ;)
Still, it's probably too much to hope he'll cut her some slack now. If Hinata is expecting a break in this regard, she's in for a painful let-down. Maybe she'll come to realize in time that her father's opinion isn't the one that matters. Still, her having an ally in the Hyuuga clan would be useful. Someone has to teach her the advanced techniques of her clan.

Too bad that her Byakugan doesn't seem to be that well developed compared to other members of her clan. I guess we won't be seeing her kick Neji's butt in this fic, unless she manages to surpass him in other areas or it turns out to be a misconception. But how high's the chance of that happening?

Quizer

Quizer posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 10:05pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Great job! I love it!
I laughed out loud at the prank Naruto pulled on Kurenai. Possibly your funniest scene ever! Good job!
BTW, what did Naruto do to the Hokage monument in canon? (and in your story as well, since there was no indication anything had changed in that regard)

The Fire Lord, as mentioned during the cat retrieval missions, is just a fancy word for Hokage, isn't it? Just wanting to make sure.

I like how Kurenai seems to take her instructor duties seriously like (apparently) no other jonin. They'll all receive a nasty surprise during chuunin exams, eh? :D

A question: The Jyuuken style itself is not a kekkai genkai, is it? So theoretically, someone outside the Hyuuga clan could learn the techniques. The problem is the execution, and knowing where the tenketsu points are. Someone without a byakugan (or maybe sharingan) would probably never be able to execute the full techniques, but there are bound to be tenketsu that are more important/vital than others and everyone can push out chakra through their palms, right? I wonder, did anybody else ever think of this? I imagine all those sharingan users would be over it like a rash...

The water-walking thing also made me wonder about something: with his enormous chakra reserve/regeneration, shouldn't Naruto be able to float in the air a là DBZ-style, or at least use chakra to boost his jumps? I know that probably requires better chakra control than he has at the moment, but he can use sheer power to partially make up for it, by expelling chakra at a broader angle. The technique could also be used to change course in mid-air to avoid enemy attacks. Will we be seeing something like this?

Great job on the overall chapter. I can't find a single thing wrong with this and I hope you'll continue in this vein! :D


Quizer

William Fowler posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 5:29pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Hey, just got into Naruto fanfiction, and believe it or not, when I saw that you wrote it, V, I was like... "no way!"

So I took a look, and was very inspired, then and there. I've seen the series, and you're right, there are so many areas that could be improved upon, had he not chosen Sakura, but Hinata. At least, even if it is just in friendship, at the moment.

Too bad I've not read enough to be considered, "experienced" enough to start writing some fanfiction in this genre, it would be very cool, I think.

Other than my ramblings, I just wanted to say, "good fic" and that I loved the NaruHina interaction.

Will

Brandon West posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 2:08pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Very good. I've only seen a few Naruto episodes, but this story is fun regardless. Keep it up.

asher1978 posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 1:02pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Another excellent part. Really liked the interaction among Shino, Naruto and Hinata. Keep up the great work and more soon please.

Lufio posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 6:55am for Geniuses of Hard Work

--,-'{@

Liking what you've done.
'Specially the chakra pulse.
Naruto's a nuke.

^_^

Long-range field recon
As the team's guiding vision,
Good theme for this fic.

Mayjest posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 6:24am for Geniuses of Hard Work

I'll be honest. I never expected to find myself reading Naruto Fanfiction, despite how much I enjoyed watching the first 100 episodes that I nicked from my mates hardrive. I will admit that I am reading this purely because I think incredibly highly of your HP fiction, Futures Past. That said, this is easily one of the best fanfics I have read. Your writing quality is easily within the top 10% of authors, and I find myself enjoying this very much so.

I am especially enjoying the parallels between this and the anime, the differnt perspectives of the characters is similar to the anime as well. It is also incredibly easy to visualise what's happening - with the exception of Naruto's new getup... He will always be in a horrible orange jumpsuit to me! In short, I am impressed.

I also compliment you on the 'shipping' side of the story. Subtle, yet strong. Subtle, in that your not shoving it in our faces, or making either Naruto or Hinata go out of character to get them started (as many authors seem prone to do), yet it is also obvious where it will end up eventually. Something which is also a boon, as I hate the stories which keep flitting around, setting characters up with several others before finaly getting to the one that the author said they would.

In short, I like it. But I would prefer a chapter of Nightmares of futures past soon!

Ladegard posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 3:29am for Geniuses of Hard Work

Very nice. The first time I read this through, I had issues with the seeming speed of changes but on further reflection realized that you had passed more time than I thought. I'm being especially impressed with the work you're doing with Shino, he's a frequently overlooked character.

- Tom

Adrian R Brown posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 2:10am for Geniuses of Hard Work

Absolutely wonderful! Incredibly written. All the characters written very believably. I can't wait to read more. I have to confess that I'm far more eager for updates to this story of yours than any other. Keep it up!

glorfy posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 12:13am for Geniuses of Hard Work

Whoo!
nice work on that chap.
Naruto proved he hasnt lost his prank making abililities, he impresses shino, and hinata gets suspisions about his red chakra.

and frankly, the chakra pulse was just cool.

was that the first time hinata went all out so far? that should help her confidence a bit, but time will tell if she manages to keep the feeling going...

love your work as always

glorfy

TomokiG posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 9:43pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Wow... that was a heck of a chapter ^.^ You know you just advanced to one of the best authors I read stories from.
I hope you're continuing as good as you currently are.

Good work...

°TomokiG °

Sebastian Palm posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 9:15pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

What a lovely surprise to wake up to in the morning - a huge chunk of *good* Naruto "whiffery"... I've been following this fic since you published the first chapter on ff.net, and frankly I don't know any more which of your two fics I look forward to reading more - they're both "drop everything and read *now*"-level...

When I got done laughung at Naruto's Henge-prank, I felt like I'd been doing sit-ups the whole morning - haven't had a laugh quite that good in a while. Thanks for that.

SP

scott2 posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 9:00pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Kyuubi is making more of an appearence (or his chakra at least) along with raising questions, shino in action rocked, a bug kage bushin, excellent.

wonder how the C grade mission for Team 7 is going...was it The wave country mission or is that coming up, Hinata is growing a spine which is awesome, I always liked her and felt the need to smack down her father, which would have got me killed course he is a ninja and I'm...not :)

until next time

Rorschach's Blot posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 6:31pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Very good, I am very impressed by the quality of this chapter and of the story as a whole. I like the way that you've taken the time to build each of the characters rather than doing a quick one line transformation. The concept behind this is excellent and so is the execution, again very good job.

Uldihaa posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 4:57pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Wonderful chapter, simply wonderful. Well written, and nicly paced. I love the way your developing Team 8 and the way the team itself is coming together. I'm really looking foward to seeing Team 8 grow and evolve.

Can't wait for the next chapter of this excelent fic.

Triggerbox posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 4:25pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

This is one of the best Naruto fanfics I have read. I really like what your doing with the characters, and the relationships of the team. Please continue this excellent fic.

kittykatluver posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 3:48pm for Geniuses of Hard Work

Very good! I like Hinata..