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Vrzepka posted a comment on Friday 15th February 2019 6:54pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

Still like everything

HPismyhero posted a comment on Saturday 23rd January 2010 6:04pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

um...lets see i love your idea and the story and love what your doing about Sirius. I also wanted to bring to your attention that Malfoy senior's cane actualy contains his wand as seen in the films even if you knew already.

mantis posted a comment on Sunday 12th April 2009 4:10pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

It just hit me, a little way into this chapter, that *this* Ginny won't *need* the diary -- she's already been pouring out her heart in her letters to Harry just the way she did with the diary in canon, and now she'll have him around to talk to.

Caramels with fish hooks? What a nasty image. Good metaphor, though.

Loved Harry calling Draco a poofter. "Rule Number One: No poofters!" Given the ever-present Crabbe and Goyle, it's an easy accusation to make, too.

That letter in the previous chapter, offering a carrot and a stick... it was to Rita, right? When will that pay off?

I'd always thought it a bit odd that canon!Harry *wasn't* much of a bibliophile; given his lonely childhood and bullying by Dudley, I would think that reading would be one of the few forms of escape and relaxation available to him, and the inside of a library is one place where Dudley would be unlikely to find him...

mantis posted a comment on Sunday 12th April 2009 4:07pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

Mantis FA 2008-06-05 . chapter 18
“I asked him to make sure that the next time Voldemort comes for me, he’ll come to Hogwarts because it’ll be the easier target.” Yup, that about sums it up. No half-measures here. :)

"In the future, Hermione had usually taken care of such things when needed. After her death, he and Ron usually moved about too much to bother with them." Interesting. As speculation about DH, this is half-right: Hermione does take care of warding their campsites, but the wards are always needed even when they're moving every single day. Fortunately, Hermione didn't die; Harry and Ron would have been up a creek without her.

“He wanted any survivors of an attack on The Burrow to have nightmares about it for the rest of their lives.” Yeah, that does sound like it would make Hogwarts the easier target...

The way you've worked Arithmancy into this story is interesting; JKR established that there is such a thing, but never did anything with it, or with Ancient Runes, even though Hermione studied the subject. It makes sense that mathematical magic would play a key role in the construction of permanent wards around a magical site.

The anchors for the permanent wards around the Burrow sound rather like the Charter Stones of Garth Nix's "Old Kingdom Trilogy" ("Sabriel," "Lirael," and "Abhorsen").

"It seems he was promoted and sent out of the country." Heh. Do wizards use the expression, "kicked upstairs?"

"a letter for one of his contacts." Rita? Given her penchant for raking the Ministry over the coals, I would think the Sirius/Pettigrew story is one she could really sink her teeth (or mandibles, as the case may be) into. Even if she wasn't so inclined, Harry has a lot of leverage he could bring to bear...

"It was surprising to Harry that some of the Weasleys didn’t get sorted into Hufflepuff instead of Gryffindor." You've noticed that, too, eh? One interesting thing about the Trio is that, while they're all unquestionably Gryffindors, they each have a strong affinity to one of the other houses. Harry, with his Parseltongue and capacity for ruthlessness, "would have done well in Slytherin;" Hermione has more of Ravenclaw's cardinal virtue than any Ravenclaw in her year, somewhat to the chagrin of that house's students, and admitted that the hat considered placing her there. Ron isn't as sharp, most ways, as either of his friends (though he obviously possesses a great deal of the peculiar kind of intelligence needed to excel at chess), but he's intensely loyal. I played a bit on that in my own fic with this little exchange:

Cho smiled at Harry. "That’s better. Now, who wants to talk Quidditch?"

Hermione rolled her eyes as Ron grinned like a madman. "What team do you follow?" he asked.

"The Tornados."

"You and half of Britain."

"They are picking up a lot of new fans this year, aren’t they? But I’ve supported them since I was six."

"Ah, well, that’s all right then," said Ron. "I just don’t care for fair-weather fans."

Cho laughed. "Let me guess: Chudley Cannons, right?"

Ron’s smile turned rueful. "Got it in one."

"I have to admire your loyalty, then. You could have been in Hufflepuff."

"Nah, only a Gryffindor would be brave enough to keep going to their matches year after year."

I think I figured out why the Ministry would want to delay Sirius' release: who inherits Twelve Grimmauld Place and the Black fortune if he dies now? Best guess would be Narcissa Malfoy. She's the youngest of the Black sisters, but with Bellatrix in Azkaban and Andromeda disowned, she's probably still Sirius' legal heir, although Andromeda might conceivably contest that.

I'm thinking that once Pettigrew is neutralized, the next major loose end Harry should be working out a way to tie off is one Bartemious Crouch Jr. It would be nice if he could foil the little creep's parents' plan to sneak him out of Azkaban in the first place. (Actually, if that hasn't happened yet the tightened security of Azkaban could have an unexpected fringe benefit.) Of course, if the Ministry morons let Pettigrew escape, knocking that link out of the chain leading to Voldemort's resurrection will become a lot more urgent.

I just read the "Snape's Eyes" essay on HP-Lexicon; very interesting, and I'm pretty much sold on the idea that Snape was using Legilimency, at least to scan surface thoughts and emotions for duplicity or animosity, throughout the series. However, it also makes a strong case, which DH proved correct, that Snape was actually working for Dumbledore, not Voldemort, even when he "murdered" (euthanized would probably be more accurate, given the headmaster's condition at the time) the former.

Oh, a couple of additional thoughts about the last chapter. First, a Glock-19 doesn't really have unlimited ammunition, but it could seem that way to the poor slob with the six-shooter on the other side of a gunfight even if there's no conjuration involved. If one was going to enchant a gun to give it unlimited ammunition, why not do it to a .44 magnum? Dirty Harry Potter, anyone? Second, I like the side benefit of getting rid of Scabbers early: the biggest source of conflict between Ron and Hermione in Year Three was Crookshanks' constant pursuit of the rat (or rat-bastard, as it turned out). I'll be interested to see what kind of familiar Hermione gets, if any, now that Crookshanks is Ron's cat.

fyrecat posted a comment on Friday 2nd January 2009 6:24pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes


"...her words were like caramels with fish hooks imbedded inside. They were nice, friendly, and polite, but it wasn’t until the implications sank in that they really started to hurt."

Wow. That's an amazing analogy/simile/metaphor! Beautiful!

redhandgrunt posted a comment on Saturday 24th May 2008 8:23am for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

Its been so long since I've read this that I am rereading to catch up. I just thought it was time I reviewed and told you how much I am enjoying your story.

Ever since I read book seven and learned that Harry had a cat I've always looked at Crookshanks and thought...

Great story I can't wait to get to the end.

Jizzle posted a comment on Monday 3rd March 2008 7:35am for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

This is one of my favorite chapters. "She sent Ron an especially big box of chocolate frogs for Christmas." is definitely one of the more moving lines in this story or for that matter, any fic I've read.

But Harry's favorite quidditch announcer isn't Luna Lovegood? Sacrilege.

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Saturday 24th November 2007 7:33am for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

Good chapter.

gunny

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 30th October 2006 3:12pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

This whole story to datr retold from Ginny's view was very well done.

I would have only been redundant.

Just choice.

Zarz posted a comment on Tuesday 2nd May 2006 10:19am for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

I'm so glad you had Harry remove the diary from Ginny's cauldron! That may seem a silly thing to say, but I read one Harry goes back to the past where he dicided that - even knowing all the pain and anguish it would cause Ginny and the rest of the school - he would let her be possessed by the diary so that she would "mature" and so forth like she did in the original time line! While I certainly can't fault Harry for wanting a more mature Ginny, the fact that he would willingly manipulate her and her life, and let that happen to her just made my skin crawl. I'm so glad that you had Harry just remove the diary and be done with it. Not only does that seem far, far more in character, but it also shows that as an author, you're willing to deal with the changes Harry would logically make to the timeline, and sort through what that would do. Several times you have Harry feeling guilty about how he's manipulated his friends, but while I think he would continue to feel guilty about it, I think he's doing the right thing, the only thing he could do. I also like your explanations about the occlumency. While I am looking forward with baited breath to the rest of the gang having decent shields and him telling them everything, most Harry back in time stories either have him tell everyone everything to begin with, or not tell anyone anything for reasons that don't make any sense, other than that he's afraid. You've come up with a brilliant, sensible plan to circumvent that and have everything logical, well-thought out, and what I imagine canon would be like if it happened this way. Good job!

jackattack posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 6:59pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

3am. Couldn't stop reading. Don't want to stop now, but vision is blurring and comprehension is slipping. Must sleep, so I can read more...

avram posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 3:13pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

"her words were like caramels with fish hooks imbedded inside"- very nice imagery.

I like this story a lot. Interesting idea, having him come back and "possess" his younger self. You definitely deserve to be on this site.

Christopher Estep posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 2:59pm for A Summer Seen Through Warm Brown Eyes

Nice to see Lucius Malfoy on the receiving end of a (Arthur) Weasley beat-down (and in front of the Grangers, no less). Even more hilarious, Ferret had to stand there and watch the beat-down (and worse, get called a pouf by Harry).