Team 8
By Viridian
Mmm the story is a bit bland, it lacks, ah whats the word, excitement? I don't know why, but it's just not giving me that spark >.>
Plots good overall, but you tend to repeat yourself, try using a thesaurus to mix up your words.
Anyways Good Luck on finishing this
Oh damn...I'm starting to think I should get off this whole website. Every other story from author to author has brought me to tears at least once. However, you at least got me to sniffle quite a bit. Trust me, getting me that far is quite a compliment. So...I praise you and your awesomeness.
I note two major changes to Naruto's character: first, his fixation on Sakura, so much more than canon that he forgoes his attention-seeking ways (smiling, laughing, being boisterous). A more
canon Naruto would act saddened one moment and the next greet his new team enthusiastically.
Second, Naruto's original reason for wanting to be Hokage was to be recognized as the strongest ninja in the village. Attention-seeking. Also, Hokage is not part of the ranking system, and being a
jounin is not a requirement to be a Hokage. If Hokage is defined as "the strongest person in the village," then a genin who has never had the opportunity to be promoted but is still recognized as
stronger than even the elite jounin could be a good candidate for Hokage.
Maa, just my observations of your divergence from canon. Decent story so far, I look towards reading on.
very good first chapter. the story was well written and flows well. a absolute master piece. keep up the good work ^^
This was rapidly becoming one of the happiest days of her life, definitely the happiest since her mother died.
Should this be This was rapidly becoming one of the happiest days of her life, definitely the happiest since before her mother died.
The first way it sounds like the day her mother died was extremely happy.
I have just recently started reading Naruto manga. And I've progressed far enough into the series to start looking for fanfiction. I'm quite happy to have found this story. Most of the Naruto
fanfiction written today just isn't in my taste so I'm happy to have found one that seems to be quite well written.
I like the way you have given Yuuhi Kurenai a brain. I can't wait to see how Naruto grows under her teaching.
I am eager to see how Hinta and Shino will also grow under her teaching. As well as what kind of affect Naruto will have on them?
I can't wait to read more!
Hi there! I've been reading HP&NFP, and I decided to see what this 'Team 8' story was about. To my surprise, it was a Naruto fic! I've only been a fan since December, lol, but I really like this! I've not read any good Naruto fics, so I look forward to reading this. I'm short only 5 chapters from being up to date with Naruto, so it's nice to have something to keep me busy. Thanks for writing!!!!
this is a great story. keep it up for all us naruto fans.
cool! That would make things better for Naruto, since his teammates don't really hate him, and his sensei is caring. YAY!
I'm beginning to draw conclusions about Kurenai now (I know, a bit early). Nice job!
So far I have got to say this is pretty cool. I think I am really going to enjoy this and I hope you will write much more.
heh, no idea at all about naruto, never seen the manga or anime. So far so good. Might want to explain the jutsu's in english terms, at the end of the chapther though.
Its very well writen and an interesting premise.
Thanks for taking the time to write and make your work public.
I just got finished with ur first chapter. I am excited to read more. You have done a great job. I my self have a fic in the making if ur interested.
Yes! I love you! Naruto Fanfics by one of the best authors around! I'm so happy. I recently started reading Naruto Fics and have become hooked. You are already doing better than most if not all of the stories I have read so far. Keep it up.
Is there any particular reason why here, Kurenai's old teammates are Yuki, Mattai, and Kobaru-sensei, but elsewhere in this story they're Kobaru-sensei, Mattai, and Nomaru?
I like it, I'm just not very familiar with the story of Naruto. Is sounds very good to me. I was hoping you could give me some background on Naruto himself. If you could send me the background info to my e-mail that would be very helpful cause i've asked others and no one that I spoke to could tell me what it was about. my email is black_kitten34@yahoo.com thank you in advance
This is a very interesting story. I've never seen a single episode of Naruto, but this fascinates me nonetheless. Apparently you've already changed several things profoundly, since in canon,
Naruto's partners appear to be those two who shunned him (I read up a tiny bit after it became clear I really know absolutely nothing). It would help if your story explained the terminology better,
by including short side-sentences, or alternatively by adding a glossar at the end of chapters. The first would make the story flow much smoother, though, and I don't think it would really be
annonying to readers who know what all that is. ;)
Quizer
Neat! I've watched some Naruto, but haven't explored the fanfic for it yet - but I really like how this one is going (being on fanficauthors.net is a strong recommendation for any story!)
I have wondered myself how Naruto's upbringing affected him - he does seem to be the typical incredibly intelligent unchallenged and unfocused type. You're doing an excellent job of developing the
teacher that could actually make him into the fighter who could become Hokage.
I like it. It is nice to see a Naruto fic where he isn't placed in Team 7.


Great job, I've been searching for a good Naruto story and it seems I've found it.