Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past

I wish that you would have read the DH first before making this story....you didn't, right? 'Cuz of Snape and stuff.

I wish that you would have read the DH first before making this story....you didn't, right? 'Cuz of Snape and stuff.

A couple of additional thoughts: Harry's rant about the "coward's way out" reminds me of Mark Pierre Vorkosigan's "Don't you dare pity me!" rant near the end of Mirror Dance; it may not quite qualify as a Crowning Moment of Awesome, but it's certainly stirring and cathartic.

The other thing is that Sirius in canon kept wanting Harry to be James, and treating him more like a peer than was perhaps appropriate at his age (though he was absolutely right that Harry should have been told about the prophecy sooner); this Harry actually is, in most ways, the person Sirius desperately wants him to be, and I look forward to seeing how their friendship develops.

One of the effects of the changes I made to establish my own alternate Potterverse is that Sirius won't get killed the way he did in OotP. (Harry will have the two-way mirror and know what it is at that point in the time-line, so when the Dark Tosser tries to use the false vision of Sirius being tortured to lure him to the DoM, Harry's reaction will be something along the lines of "Nice try, Tom. Pull the other one, it's got bells on.") That will have major ripple effects down the road, because he's arguably the most ruthless member of the Order of the Phoenix (though Moody might contest that title) -- his reaction to an Imperiused Minister of Magic won't be "OMG run and hide," it'll be "figure out which Death Eater is pulling the Minister's strings, and take him off the count." Followed by a bloody purge of the quislings like Dolores Umbridge who willingly did Voldemort's dirty work.

1001 Practical Jokes and Dirty Tricks -- it could have been worse; for a moment there, I thought he'd gone and bought them The Anarchist's Cookbook. Not a bad idea down the road, actually, especially if Voldemort still manages to seize the Ministry and institute the Taboo on his name -- they could use that to pull a bunch of his loyalists into an improvised minefield, and Apparate away just before the fireworks start. I also kind of wonder what mayhem F&G could get up to with a copy of Grimtooth's Traps for inspiration....

Poor Dawlish, always the patsy.

"When know one was looking" should be "no one."

Interesting that Harry mentions Sirius' brother; I always thought it sad that Sirius died before he could learn that his brother died a hero, trying to destroy what he apparently believed was Voldemort's sole Horcrux. (Yeah, I know that wasn't confirmed until DH, but really, who else would "R.A.B." have been? Virtually the whole online fandom had that one figured out.)

Finally! Good to see Harry having a real confidante at last. In the original timeline, Sirius had a huge amount of potential that went to waste when he was killed, so I'm very glad to see some of it coming to fruition here. I also loved his reaction to finding out how he died before ("Killed by a stunner? Because I stopped fighting to taunt her?" -- when you put it that way, it is pretty embarrassing, isn't it?), and Harry's "Try not to do it again, all right?"

“I’m glad he and Tonks got together, though I never would have pictured it.” That's probably because Sirius wouldn't really know Tonks at this point -- we know he was fond of her, but she was just a little girl, five or six years old when he was sent to Azkaban, and he hasn't had a chance to meet the adult Tonks yet.

How does Harry know his Patronus is still a stag? He hasn't summoned it yet in this timeline, and it might have changed to whatever animal is associated in his mind with Ginny. (Incidentally, there was one H/G story I rather liked in which Ginny's patronus turned out to be a mongoose -- she'd apparently read "Rikki-Tikki-Tavi" at some point, and associated Rikki with Harry the serpent-slayer.)

"I may be up for a bit of grave robbing as well." Oh, clever. No bone of the father for you, Dark Tosser! And if Sirius can gather up the Horcruxes and he and Harry can destroy them, maybe there won't be anything for the Death Eaters to even try to resurrect. They ought to do something to preempt Barty Crouch Jr.'s escape, or expose him if he's already out, as well.

I love all the gifts. Trust Percy to disguise a warning about rule-breaking as a present. "Playwizard" made me chuckle, and the watch was lovely... although it also recalled a certain scene from "Pulp Fiction." I hope Harry doesn't get in trouble by going back for it when he needs to be making a quick getaway later on...

"finished his hot chocolate the set" should be "then set" I do believe.

"when know one was looking" should be "when no one was looking."

"he paid for it was well" should be "he paid for it as well," no?

I thought an earlier chapter, when Harry is first explaining his plan of freeing Sirius via fake memories, he mentions having heard about Sirius play with baby Harry frequently. And in dog form too. If so, Sirius' comment about Lily and fleas contradicts.

"so that exactly what he did" is just wrong. Perhaps "so that was exactly what he did" would fix it?

The part about Tonks is just off. Why does Sirius say, "she'll have to find another reason." They were just talking about Remus getting with Tonks because she made him laugh. The "she" makes it seem like they suddenly switch to talking about Tonks' reason for getting with Remus. Totally doesn't make sense.

That's all I caught. Either my eyes suddenly got sharper, or this chapter wasn't polished to quite the same blinding shine the others have been. Either way, excellent work, and good luck on your revision.

Outstanding chapter. I really like it that Harry does what is needed to protect the good people and not worry about the bad guys getting hurt or killed.

gunny

Excellent Christmas.

Wonderful find-and-rescue Sirius.

You just have to love Arthur to pieces.

You made me get all teary. The part where Harry told off Sirius up until the "I watched him murder Dumbledor" line had me all teary eyed and chin quivery. Wonderful writing, you really managed to draw me in.
. . . Oh great. Now my nose is running. Oh well, it was worth it. On to the next chapter.

This is really cool, and I can't wait to see how Moony's classes turn out. I wonder what Harry's boggart will be like? Will it still be a dementor but with even more horrible memories from Harry? If he decides to use the Riddikulus spell rather than the Patronus, I think it would be really funny to watch the dementor start melting like the Wiked Witch of the West. If, of course, Harry managed to do anything but simply remember. The other option I see would be for the boggart to cycle through Harry's worst memories. Of course, if it tried to go through all of them I suppose we'd see if a boggart could spontaniously combust!

The other thing I'm wondering about is if Harry will decide to teach the DA the Patronus charm. I can just imagine McGonnigall sitting in the back of the classroom completely flabberghasted that a thrid year is teaching first years on up a NEWT level spell! And if his friends ask him if he really expects anyone to get the charm, he can just answer, "Well, if I could do it as a third year, then you can too." Of course, they'd probably object and tell him it's rather unfair because he's also thirty, at least until he mentions he managed to get the spell right in his third year the first time around as well!

Anyway, just my random thoughts about the coming year. I spend way too much time in my life thinking about your story. But hey, it's summer, and I don't have a job yet. So really good work, and my congratulations on a story so thought-provoking that I can't get it out of my head! Great job!

I love this story. It is the best time travel fic I have read. It's just brilliant. The whole occulemency part is really well planned out. One question though. I thought that Harry was calling the weasleys Molly and Arthur but in ch 23, he is calling them Mr & Mrs Weasley again. If he is doing it out of habit shouldn't they be reminding him to call them by their given names?

Natalie

Excellent chapter, I really like the idea of making Sirius an occlumens so Harry can finally have someone who directly supports him while knowing all of the information. Great job, and keep up the good work. I am very interested in what Malfoy will do to Harry et al in retribution for the raid on his father's stores of dark objects. That should provide very interesting material for a chapter.

I've been following this story both here and on FF.net, and I think it's incredibly captivating. Please keep updating!

This is absolutely fabulous. I wait with baited breathe for the next installment.

I understand that life happens and interfers with the things we like to do. Just, please, update ASAP. Whenever that is. I really am enjoying this story. It is very well done. I'm looking forward to more soon. Thank you for writing.
pms

well...gr8 work i must say but u really messed up my schedule, i mean i have been up the whole last nite reading this fic...i like the idea of time travelling, though the way harry is manipulatin the whole situation even dumbledore looks like a kid infront of him :) neways gr8 work as i said, i think this is in harry/ginny things but i'd like to see what happens to harry if he gets a lil competetion in this department from someone...just a thought..hehe

I might have already reviewed for this chapter at another sight, but I just wanted to reiterate how pleased I am with this work. Harry's outburst at Sirius was just beautiful :) Thanks, again! I promise, more detailed reviews in the future.

I've spent the most of the day reading this, and I must say how fantastix this story is! Good work!

Fancy seeing you here! I just read and reviewd your fic at...hmm, I'm not quiet sure actually O_o Either way, I'm glad to see you around. Cheers!

A little grave robbing could mean a moot point on the Voldemort Front. A horcrux may keep him from being more than a foot into death, but he needed that potion to regenerate. Rob the graves of all male ancestors that Siris can find, and you're gold, especially because the only willing servant is in Ministry custody, though of course that could change. Possibly a tip to Dumbles to take a visit to the Crouch residence, possibly after exhuming "Crouch Jr's" body at Azkaban to prove that it was his mother.

The story is great, but getting a little tedious-I think it's time that Harry's crew finds out his secrets. Maybe clue Dumbledore in on a few points, and offer some threats to Snape in the form of parchment on their doors (Martin Luther's 95 Theses style), signed "The Backwards Phoenix" or "The Risen Phoenix." Both apply aptly to this Harry but would throw even Dumbledore possibly.

Update Update Update. This is a great Harry goes back in time story. I love how you have changed things I cant wait to see what you change next. I know you are holding out on fluff, between H/G and R/Hr, because they are still a little young and you a slowly bring them along at just the right pace. L/N ha ha ha she knows what she wants and is going to take it weather he knows or not. Thanks for the great writing. Update soon.

MPF