Harry Potter and the Nightmares of Futures Past
By Viridian
god dammit.. I cant believe i haven't found this story b4, i need to goto sleepy for school tomorrow. but ill finish it tomorrow :P
-Night
I've just started to reread this for probably about the fifth time, and I wanted to take a minute to let you know that I think these first couple chapters are some of the most moving stuff I've
ever read. I think the top two moments are when Harry sees Ginny for the first time, and especially when he tells his younger self "Oh Harry, you're going to have great friends." I've read that at
least 4 times and I still teared up.
I like the later parts of the story more for the plot and the action, but these first few pack are some of the best stuff I've ever read, fanfic or not. Thank you very much for sharing them.
Jay
This is interesting, but I don't find it as, absorbing as Team 8 or Out of the Darkness.
Good chapter. I love to see a powerful take charge kick ass Harry.
gunny
I like your going back in time plot. As you said, so many things went wrong the first time round.
Your grammar and dialog are beautiful. It's all professional.
> He chair was pulled away from the desk and a
> strange man was sitting in it. He was very
> thin, and looked incredibly tired and
> haggard. Lank black hair fell across his face
> and his eyes were shadowed.
Now this is an interesting development. A Yami!Harry co-existing in little Harry's mind. Too bad they decided to fuse their spirits. I would have paid money to see how this plays out if Yami!Harry
had continued to reside in Harry's mind, coming to the fore when it is convinient or when Harry is in a dangerous situation, but mostly advising him through mind-to-mind speak and letting him act on
his own apart from that. Like I said, too bad they fused. Your concept is interesting, but I imagine this initial condition to have far more potential. But it's your story! ^_^ Still, I'd like to
hear your thoughts on this idea!
I also like the changes Harry tries to effectuate on his friends. They aren't terribly subtle, but you explain them well in Harry's thoughts, so it doesn't look amateurish.
It's also a little strange to see eleven year old kids talking about love, but having already been an adult, Harry is bound to never be able to look at girls in that eleven year-old way again. And
since Ron responds with the disgust appropriate for that age, it doesn't look amateurish either. Good job! I can't wait to see how this plays out either!
Quizer
The conversation old Harry had with his younger self was absolutely brilliant and heartwarming. If you didn't love the kid you would have that. Just great!
The conversation with the goblins was also a fine bit of 'innocent-eleven-year-old' train of thought working out just like Harry wanted.
This is so well written!
Ronald Bilius Weasley, take Harry's advice: get to know Hermione Granger. Can't hurt, and could help.
The boy looked up at the man, eyes growing damp as well. “Will I really have friends at this new school?”
The man nodded and took a shaky breath. “Oh Harry, you are going to have great friends. You are going to have so many people love you that you won’t be able to believe it.”
The boy stood up from the bed. “Then I am not letting anything happen to them. Not if I can stop it.” He stuck out his hand.
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I've read this story a few times, but I had to come back today just for this scene. It's been in my head for a couple days now, and I've been tearing up at some rather inappropriate moments. So lovely!