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Name: Potter&Granger
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Tuesday 26th May 2009 7:43pm

well, first i think of this fanfic as fascinating as the books themselvs, and upon other thinghs, i think it may be great to see this fanfic to became a movie, or two that is.

i'm not completly shure about waht could be the meaning of

"He’d think back, later, on the irony of such a thought."
as I see this could mean two things.
One: it's really just harry paranoia getting out of control
Two: he will be regretting later on, on such a thought, because it came to be true what had hapenned on harry's dream. Except from the part of his core blowing up off course and mainly because this would ends in harry's death.

Anyway i'll be thankfully if you answer that little one.

For further information I here leave my email adress wich is:
benny_gaggero@hotmail.com

Great fic, Matthew

Name: Potter&Granger
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Tuesday 26th May 2009 7:24pm

The part of his dream about his core exploding was probably just his imagination going into paranoid overdrive. He’d never heard of such a thing happening before, but it did make for a very dramatic ending.
He’d think back, later, on the irony of such a thought.

what does this mean? seems like this story it's going in a pretty dark direction. Harry should take this "dream" far more seriously, despite Ginny's reassure.
He should do some research on this matter after all, what he hasn't hear about it doesn't mean that can't happen, though Harry is the only one known to do such thing and therefore it would be difficult to find a precedent on it.

In the matter of what Dumbledore might or might not do once he finds out the truth, whether Harry finally says to him or not.

If Harry does and he can explain all to him, all his reasons, all the details, being sure that Dumbledore wouldn't do something foolish until Harry finish what he has to say, maybe with a magical binding oath though, Dumbledore wouldn't have to take such extreme meassure, by the other hand he would obliviate Harry if he doesn't have all the details.

A great story by the way, it keeps me pretty much on edge and i'm looking forward to read more. When something else pops in my my mind, rest for sure that i will review more...

Keep on trucking Matthew...

Name: mantis
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Monday 20th April 2009 1:02pm

"I can’t really afford to slack off for three months, now can I?" Hogwarts summer break is only two months -- classes start the first of September and end at the end of June.

"I can’t believe they cooked up something that devious without any input from you." Interesting insight; I think it's probably true that Ginny is the most Slytherinesque of all Harry's close friends. Anyway, it was very clever of the girls to take out some Obliviation insurance. I'm thinking, though, that it might not be such a bad idea for Harry to write [i]everything[/i] down, password-protect the scroll like the Marauder's Map, and seal it up in his Gringotts vault. The password could be some piece of information from his childhood that nobody else would know, and a cryptic clue that he, and only he, would be able to use to figure out the password unless [i]all[/i] his memories were obliviated. For example, the scroll might ask about some of Harry's accidental magic incidents, and then ask what punishment he received for them. (E.G. "Regrowing my hair after Aunt Petunia cut it -- a week in the cupboard under the stairs. Shrinking Dudley's old sweater -- no punishment, she thought it shrunk in the wash. What color was the sweater? Brown with orange puffballs.")

"He’d think back, later, on the irony of such a thought." Ouch. What future horror are you foreshadowing there, anyway?

The discussion of Hermione and Ron's possible future prefecture seems a bit premature. It's something they might have discussed during fourth year, or the summer after it -- I didn't think the badges coming as a total surprise in OotP made all that much sense -- but this soon?

Your characterization of Dumbledore looks way off the mark to me, but justifiable given the canon up through HBP, even though I wouldn't have agreed with it before. As I've mentioned, my own surmises regarding Snape turned out to be mostly right when DH came out, and the same holds true for Dumbledore -- though of course I never guessed at any of the things that weren't even hinted at prior to DH, his relationship with Grindelwald and the deaths of his parents and sister. I'll be interested to see how much DH canon you incorporate into this story; I can't see any way of working in the Hallows, there's no way they wouldn't play a significant role in Harry's future memories, but the Grindelwald/Ariana/Aberforth material could easily be incorporated, I would think.

"Deeds, not words, you uninspired bookends!" Now that's an inspired insult for a pair of identical twins.

Name: mathiasgranger
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Friday 21st March 2008 6:21am

Man for a story that wasn't supposed to be endless angst, you sure are heaping on the endless angst.

All I see are people without any idea of the future being so shirtsighted one would think they are all idiots. Why didn't they just end the Malfoy line right then and there in the office? I'm sure it would have saved them endless grief, and lives.

~Matt

Reply from: Viridian

Well let's see. Cold-blooded murder in front of witnesses. Do you really think Dumbledore would countenance such a course of action?

Even beyond that, Lucius is prominent enough that disposing of him quietly would prove impossible.

Name: Jizzle
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Sunday 9th March 2008 9:27am

"Fully prepared to take him to task if he relented" doesn't quite make sense to me. Should it be "until he relented"? The thing that Dumbledore is giving into is firing the greasy bastard, right?

Reply from: Viridian

Actually more like he might waffle and decide to give Snape "just one more chance" because, after all "it's for the greater good".

Name: Hoss
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Monday 3rd December 2007 4:32am

Not much to say, I like the diffrent POV your doing and doing real well!. Thanks for a fun read.

Name: TxA_GunFighter
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Monday 26th November 2007 8:35am

Good chapter.

gunny

Name: Aaran St Vines
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Thursday 2nd November 2006 6:06am

The destruction of the Dumbledore Obliviation Attack was chilling. I did not have a clue how you could fix that.

It was so rattling that I couldn't be any gladder that it was a dream.

Well done!

Name: Reviewer-Who-Begs-For-Updates
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Sunday 27th August 2006 11:49pm

I liked how Harry and Ginny supported Percy. I especially liked Harry's explanation. Nice chapter.

Name: swordchucks
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Sunday 27th August 2006 12:52am

I'm not widely read in the HP fandom world, but I have to say that I like your story a lot. The idea of the "old mind, new body" isn't a new one (I wrote Sailor Moon fics based on it back in the late '90s), but it is a good one. In fact, I just recently finished the HBP (if you make yourself wait, the gap between books seems less) and liked it a lot more than some of the previous books.

I can talk a little about why I like that book, because I like the same things about your fic. First of all, there is a major shift happening in the book where Harry goes from just the protagonist to being the hero of the story. I feel that is the reason why Dumbledore had to die, and I approve of it on that basis. Your fic has a similar theme with Harry becoming the custodian of his own destiny (and that of his friends) much earlier in the story. This is a good theme, and I like it.

Secondly, I feel that, to an extent, the focus of the books is moving away from magic and on to characters. There are still new spells and the like, but the main focus appears to be more on the people using the magic than the magic itself. Your story is obviously character centric, and I like the Ginny angle.

I think your author's notes answer a lot of the criticisms that I might offer, but not all. the largest of which is that I don't like the way Harry and Dumbledore interact. I think it's a valid way for them to interact, I just don't like it.

I think it might be a failing of Future Harry that he can't bring himself to trust others or that he plots too much.

To an extent, the martial arts stuff seems a little odd, too. I would probably do it, too (hell, I think I probably did it in the long ago Sailor Moon fic), but it's somewhat odd. Fortunately, you gloss over a lot of the martial arts stuff, just like the magic, which is the right thing to do.

There are also a few bits of plot that feel like the decision isn't quite natural (generally feeling contrived). As I don't believe there are any of these in the last chapter, I'm not going to dig out an example (since complaining about it is pointless).

Anyway, I love the writing of this story. It's a step below something I'd expect to find in print, but it's a quite small step.

Name: Hot48cricket
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Friday 25th August 2006 6:52am

You really have a great story and you write it extremely well.

I gasped when Harry dreamed (within a dream!) that Dumbledore killed everyone! That was good.

I laughed (at my desk at work - it's a good think I work in a fun office!) where Harry said to the twins: "Deeds, not words, you uninspired bookends!" - that was brilliant!

Name: ted slack
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Monday 21st August 2006 11:58am

I have no issues. I simply enjoy NoFP immensely! This story is among the very best of the many, many
Potterverse stories I've read. Keep up the great work, please.

Name: M. R. Moore
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Sunday 20th August 2006 6:01am

It's almost hard to believe it took 29 chapters to get here. I think i've been reading on and off for a week.

But it's better than the ones that plow through the books to get to the good parts. Like the story I once read that had Harry gun down the troll with a P90 at the beginning of the chapter and then it was like the author hit fast foreward and he was shooting Quirrel, all in an 5000 word chapter.

I'm seriously looking foreward to teh next chapter.

Name: erin5
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Saturday 19th August 2006 9:19am

Brilliant, as ever. :)

Name: Evan2
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Wednesday 16th August 2006 10:09am

This review is actually about the picture (I couldn't say anything about this chapter that the other reviewers haven't already said, although there is plenty to say, all of it complimentary, even the nightmare, as it shows that Harry is capable of having ones about this timelime instead of the old one). Awesome picture, except that Ginny has brown eyes, not blue. Plz change that, because then it looks exactly like the 6 comrades would be.

Reply from: Viridian

If you do a mouse-over on the portrait, it should display that I am not the artist who drew it. It was a gift, fan-art from Raide. I just wish I could draw that well!

Name: parakletos
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Saturday 12th August 2006 7:01am

How nice to come back from holiday and find that you had updated. The parts i enjoy most are those where things start to diverge from the timeline that Harry already knows.

Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to reading more.

Name: Wolfric
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Tuesday 8th August 2006 1:50pm

I like this story a great deal. Please keep up the writing. The mix of action and angst is quite good. I am wondering if Dumbledore will figure it out... Harry will have to keep on his toes to out manouvre the headmaster.

Name: MarinePotterfan
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Tuesday 8th August 2006 4:16am

I really like this chaper, well until I thought you killed Harry, and then made it a dream. To comment on your A/N. If you would have ended it at the end of the dream. I would have had to call in an Airstrike on your computer. Because when I was reading that part, I was saying to myself is he just going to end the story here, what is going on. And then you made it a dream. I noticed that Ginny did not tell her mom about winning the dueling turnament. I am glad that even though Ginny knows that her and Harry get togather she is still taking it slow. But she adds a little more each time. I see it growing into something more next school year though. Thanks for writing a great story I await your next update.

MPF

Name: Renzo7
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Saturday 5th August 2006 4:54pm

Great chapter, I liked the mad dumbledore scene and the characterizations all around. Excellent work, keep it up and please update soon.

Name: Anaknisatanas
Chapter: A Relatively Pleasant Start
Posted On: Saturday 5th August 2006 3:51pm

Great ending there. Maybe with the way Harry is treating Percy he will start being a bit less pratish. I can't wait to see the explosion that the Weasley parents are sure to have when Harry tells them what the others know after they have mastered Occlumency

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